Kaleidoscope

Three times I tried to write

Hands stretched out to me in the hall
Clay under fingernails
Electric band saw starts again

I disappear beneath these plastic sheets
Curled like a new born
Wailing

I have such potential
It will take more than a month to deal with a lifetime of pain
I may need something else to help me

Blankets form between my fists
Jagged cuts stare at me
A head stuffed with bent nails and hooks

Emotion flows in time with the blood

I am walking and smoking
Talking and thinking
A magpie swoops past

Fish on Friday
Home on Saturday
Back on Sunday

It was safer then
Following a timetable
Dull and numb

Spin that wheel again

Wow, I like this! I think this is my favorite:

quote:

I have such potential
It will take more than a month to deal with a lifetime of pain
I may need something else to help me

Good stuff.

it's good to see you're writing again.
keep it up...

Argy,

Words escape, suffice to say, I'm feelin' it, on a level I can't begin to describe.

More, please.

Mmmmm, I just read it again and I can see a lot of changes to make.

Thanks for the kind words though, folks.

I need to leave more space for the reader.

Something like this would be better, I think:

Kaleidoscope

Three times I tried to write

Hands stretched out
Clay under fingernails
Electric band saw whirs again

Disappear beneath plastic sheets
Curled like a new born
Wailing

You have such potential
It will take more than a month
You may need something else

Blankets form between fists
Jagged cuts stare out
A head stuffed with bent nails and hooks

Emotion flows in time with blood

Walking and smoking
Talking and thinking
Magpies swoop past

Fish on Friday
Home on Saturday
Back on Sunday

Recite the timetable
Dull and numb

Spin that wheel again