06 June 2004, 02:08 AM
Sara"Non-Existent Ticket"
If you don't get this poem, s'alright. If the person this is for happens to read it and gets it, good. If not, then pay no mind.
As always, for your amusement.
"Non-Existent Ticket"
Spur of the moment decision, really
I had no intention of going anywhere tonight
But I checked online
For the next available time
And got in my car and drove
I got there late,
took a seat near the front
Sat next to strangers which I hate
A couple all cute in love, gag
A couple who were intent on the scene
And I sat there in the middle, watching
Familiar sounds, familiar themes
Familiar faces, for $7.50,
$7.50 damnit!
On something I don't even like
That I'll never tell anyone I went to
That I'll hide this non-existent ticket
That said I was ever there...
But I was and I went...so I could feel close to you.
--SMC
06 June 2004, 03:31 AM
Free MadnessVery well written--I loved the first verse and the last verse the best--just kind of grabbed me.
Spur of the moment decision, really
I had no intention of going anywhere tonight
But I checked online
For the next available time
And got in my car and drove
Familiar sounds, familiar themes
Familiar faces, for $7.50, $7.50 damnit!
On something I don't even like
That I'll never tell anyone I went to
That I'll hide this non-existent ticket
That said I was ever there...I just love the flow of that language. I've missed your poems, Sara. It's good to see one again!

05 July 2005, 04:51 AM
ArgeauxThis is a very tight poem in that no words feel as though they have been wasted.
I can 'hear' a lot of the 'voice' of the poem's character coming through, which gives it a lot of charm and makes it easy to read.
Lovely.

05 July 2005, 07:18 AM
KSenaI have one word for you: NICE!
