i recently heard someone say that something bothered them, but in a good way. i liked the idea of that. this little silliness ensued...

you bother me

you bother me
don’t go away
i rather like it
and wish you’d stay

an irritant
sand in my eye
i need it there
don’t ask me why

an itch, a prickle
under my skin
why should i fight it
i’d never win

you bother me
make no mistake
like a faucet’s drip
it keeps me awake

i’m not masochistic
but i do have a clue
i know i’m alive
by this stone in my shoe

to live without it
to finally be free
now that would really
bother me

let us never say
we can’t be bothered

Zoom

I *really* liked that. It was so different and interesting, and I think the best poetry is something that captures quirks in every day life. (not just pain and angst, which is what a lot of poetry focuses on)

A very wise little girl once told me that pain is just a reminder that we exist. This stanza reminded me of that:

im not masochistic
but i do have a clue
i know im alive
by this stone in my shoe

I rather liked being bothered to read this.

Excellent.

Funny, but apart from its universal 'usefulness' it also encapsulates quite well why I'm a die hard Xena fan.

caught on the hop
The Xenatizer

[ June 29, 2002, 11:14 PM: Message edited by: The Xenatizer ]

That was pretty damn cool. Thank you for sharing.

Great little poem zoomy. I like the way you got it too. We have to mine what there is to be good writers, don't we? Even if it seems trivial, if it touches us, it can touch others and that's the whole idea!

I liked this one, too.

Don't have time to say why, but I will in a little while.

Then I'll write ya an essay.

Until then - keep up the good work!!

Argyi'll hold ya to it!

thanks for the comments, guys. i kinda like this one too. it seems to have many applications (i especially enjoyed Xenitizer's), and that makes me happy.

zoom,

Hehe...that is so awesome -- I enjoyed that very much...possibly one of my faves. I don't know what else to say about it other than...it rocks.

~Gabber

An Essay for Ms Zoomy

you bother me

Already I like this poem. Is it gonna be cantankerous? What lies ahead? I can't wait to find out ...

you bother me
don’t go away
i rather like it
and wish you’d stay

Intriguing. The narrator enjoys being bothered, despite the fact that bothering someone is usually seen as a negative thing to do. Why does the writer like to be bothered? I must read on to find out.

an irritant
sand in my eye
i need it there
don’t ask me why

So, the poet isn't even sure herself why she likes to be bothered, even though it is clearly something that isn't enjoyable.

an itch, a prickle
under my skin
why should i fight it
i’d never win

Now, it seems, the writer is resigning herself to the annoyance, and learning to love it, rather than REALLY enjoying it.

you bother me
make no mistake
like a faucet’s drip
it keeps me awake

Back to highlighting how the bothering is NOT a good thing. Why, why, why, then, does the poet enjoy it?

i’m not masochistic
but i do have a clue
i know i’m alive
by this stone in my shoe

Aha! Finally we have the answer. There IS a positive side to being bothered. Much like knowing we are because we think, the bothering reminds the writer that she has the ability to feel it because she is alive. It has awakened her to her own existence.

to live without it
to finally be free
now that would really
bother me

The flip side - not to be bothered means the opposite of feeling, or even the end of life. Numbness. The writer chooses feelings, even negative ones, over nothingness. Makes sense to me.

let us never say
we can’t be bothered

Not sure whether this is still part of the poem, or a reflection on its theme, but I like this twist of the meaning of "bother". An important lesson, indeed.

Like I said above - GREAT POEM!!

thanx hon!

i did intend the last two lines as part of the entire piece. you know me--if there's meaning to be monkeyed with, i'm just the monkey to do it...

Cool!I like it. This one was fun!

um, just thought i'd tell you. i liked it too... it was sweet--in the cool way... like the... aaaaahhh, yeah.... way. thanks for sharin

mons

I ,as a general rule, dont like poetry...
HAY! Ya cant dance to it.. & if one has something to say..
a straightforward kinda guy like me thinks its best if they just come out & say it...

this was an amusing & enjoyable read & it reminds me that most Personal growth DOES come when we are pushed outside our comfort zone,does it not...??

Thanks for this poem...its a most worthwhile effort

Wow. I am really feelin this poem! It's cool. My favourite lines:

to live without it
to finally be free
now that would really
bother me

and

you bother me
dont go away
i rather like it
and wish youd stay

Excellent job!