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the neverending tenacles pound down on me,
painfully burn my tender, thin skin.
i allow this and welcome it,
this is my religion, my pennance.
no longer can i stand unhelped in this prison,
i lean back and the coldness stings.
regained strength and upright once more,
the fire lashings, the slow burn.
i have served my time all things must end,
and with my choice, i stop the torment.
i step out wrapped in terrycloth comfort,
cleansed and hopeful of a better day.


~b
 
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I like this a lot. It's very powerful, great imagery. Hope the days are better!


"Even when you're down and blue, just remember that someone out there loves you, even if you don't know it and even if you haven't yet met them. There's someone out there waiting for you, remember that and keep faith. You'll get there."
~~Johnny Depp.


 
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thanks.

it's about taking a shower. lol. Smile

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lol i kinda wondered that when you talked about the terrycloth comfort hehe. Then I read that it was afteraffects of a bad day...well actually sometimes a shower helps me after a bad day too so heh.RazzSmile

anyway good writin, take care!


"Even when you're down and blue, just remember that someone out there loves you, even if you don't know it and even if you haven't yet met them. There's someone out there waiting for you, remember that and keep faith. You'll get there."
~~Johnny Depp.


 
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Makes me want to take a shower...okay and the fact that I might need a shower.

Beautiful words. Smile


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you know you've written a good poem when you write about something tactile like a shower, but it evokes an emotional response. nice.


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This sounds like a modern day version of Dante's inferno, to me.

I kind of wonder what the poor soul did to deserve this ... although it all turns out well in the end.

Maybe they've been cleansed in a Purgatory of their own making?


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